Do not delete any sentences related to the technical areas. Kindly go through every single word and phrase, and determine whether the choices of words and phrases are appropriate in this context.

Statement of Purpose

Discipline: Mechanical Engineering
School: MIT

Messages to Writer:
1. Try to modify it to fit in 3-page limits without changing the meaning of each paragraph.
2. Do not delete any sentences related to the technical areas.
3. Kindly go through every single word and phrase, and determine whether the choices of words and phrases are appropriate in this context.
4. Kindly to go through every sentence and check if the professional academic reader can read the sentences fluently and smoothly.
5. Make sure the transition between each sentence and paragraph is smooth.
6. [Optional] Could you try to use 1.5 line spacing?