Explain what you found notable about these two points. How do they illustrate a successful moment in the workshop process?

Discussion

For this Discussion, read through all the workshop responses (all the workshop responses on all the drafts, not just the responses to your own draft), and find TWO specific examples (from two different writers) of commentary that struck you as especially helpful or observant. And explain what you found notable about these two points. How do they illustrate a successful moment in the workshop process? Again, you need to choose from workshop comments made on others’ papers, not the comments your own paper received, and you need specific examples from two different writers. You should also look back at the rough draft themselves, so you have some context for the comments.
In your post, identify the writer of the draft and the person workshopping it by name.